Puppy's Poems...

[~[Nanaki]~]

Ok...took me lots of guts to post this...so tell me what ya'll think...or anything atleast...

Wolf Love [/u][/i]
A wolf she is,
so naturally you see,
She stares at the moon,
And howls at it too.
She turns back to see,
to see her love,
She stares at his crystal blue eyes,
As he stares at her brown eyes.
They stare at each other to see,
A twinkle in their eyes.

Mexican Butterfly's Painful love? [/i][/u]
I am a dark,
Mexican butterfly.
I fly freely,
Without a cage to surround me.
I fly alone,
Without someone to comfort me.
I find true love,
But true love seems to die too soon.
Despair fills my heart,
But hope comforts me,
Telling me one day I will,
Find my true love,
A love that doesn't fly away,
A love that doesn't die,
A love filled with happyness.
Now tell me something...
Will this Mexican Butterfly,
Find true love,
That doesn't pain so much?


Ok these are some of the first poems I ever wrote. Yes they are Dumb, but just tell me how I should improve or how I did.
-PuppyWolf. aka puppy. [/color]

[Destiny]

I think you did good WWWAAAYYY better than I could do.

[~[Nanaki]~]

...nah, bet yours are better...I'm just a newbie at this stuff...no really I am...these are the first poems I wrote.
-Puppy.

[Destiny]

No they aren't, because I lust started to write poems I'm just embarrassed to put them on a thread.

[~[Nanaki]~]

...aww...I'm sure your poems are alright. They can't be as bad as the one's I'm writting now. lol...my writting's getting worse.